Update

Hello, I'm currently working on my introduction and I'm worried it's getting a little off topic in the beginning. My topic is on the negative influence media has on children but I'm introducing my essay talking about the development of technology. I guess you can see how they are related but at the same time, it takes me a while to get into my topic. When I let my peers read it they both asked "So what is your topic about?" Well mostly because I didn't finish writing my thesis but still, I took too long getting to the point.  I think instead I will write a brief story relating to my topic to "segway" into my thesis statement.