Update

Hello, currently I'm writing my revised version of my essay. I'm taking in consideration the ideas you gave me during the meting we had. I know it doesn't take much for me to make it better I just have to find the time to actually do it. I've been so stressed with school and auditions for the In the Heights musical and pretty much anythings involving acting. But I just need to relax and just finish what I started to I can feel self accomplished. I came to far to mess up.

Happy Thanksgiving :-)

UPDATE

So I got my grade back for the research paper Draft and surprisingly it's a potential grade of a B. I'm happy it's a B because I know exactly what I did wrong with my essay. Since I was rushing to get it done because I had so much other work to do with my job on top of, I went of on a tangent at the end. My beginning argument was very clear that I thought media had a negative effect. At the end I tried to find a solution to lowering the influence by telling parents what they should do. Not that it was a bad idea but I went about it the opposite way. Instead I should have blamed the parents for neglecting their children and not being concerned enough.  Also I need to include other reasons that my neglect children's well being like the schools or government. I will just do some grammatical changes and fix my last 3 paragraphs and I think I'm good for an A+. :-)

Update

Currently in the process of writing my research paper. I already have my introduction completed from the time we did it in class. I'm worried that I will either not finish, or it just won't be good enough in time for the due date. It's really hard for me to focus especially when I have time to complete an assignment. For some reason my mind seems to operate better when there's little time left. I know procrastination can be really risky, especially with assignments like this but it might be the only way I can do work. Either that or on the train is when my neurons are working best. Let's just see what happens while I sit here on my laptop.What


AND..... 10 minutes later I dosed off ALREADY!!!

What am I going to do with myself?

Update

Hello, I'm currently working on my introduction and I'm worried it's getting a little off topic in the beginning. My topic is on the negative influence media has on children but I'm introducing my essay talking about the development of technology. I guess you can see how they are related but at the same time, it takes me a while to get into my topic. When I let my peers read it they both asked "So what is your topic about?" Well mostly because I didn't finish writing my thesis but still, I took too long getting to the point.  I think instead I will write a brief story relating to my topic to "segway" into my thesis statement.

Research outline

My Research outline